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The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extend do you agree or disagree?Nowadays shops have extended opening hours almost every day of the week in many countries. Is it a positive or negative development for shoppers and local communities?

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recent times, due to
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increasing demand of shoppers and their preferred time to
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, many
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 owners have decided to extend their
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hours
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 on the local community members and shoppers respectively.
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 of
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 has a positive impact on the shoppers especially on those who like to
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 in the evening. Long
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hours
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 are advantageous to many
people
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 who go for
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shopping to escape from their daily routine and hectic work schedule.
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 day feeling motivated to work after spending time in malls during
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 opening the shops for longer duration on weekdays have a good impact on the citizens. On the other side, opening malls for a longer duration can affect the
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 living in the
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 especially during late evenings. Opening shops till late drive the traffic which causes noise pollution and
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 resulting into sleepless nights.
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, longer
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hours
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 of malls increase the congestion on the roads in nearby areas causing more delays to the citizens.
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 around the area which will harm
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 of the local community.
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, extended opening
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 can have detrimental effects on
people
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. To sum up, recently, shops have expanded their opening
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 for shoppers’ convenience.
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 norm is benefiting
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 who do not get enough to
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 during
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, whereas, citizens of
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 locality are suffering from major problems like noise and air pollution.
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