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In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

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In the
last
 20
years
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 the budget
families
 spend in retail markets has considerably increased around the world.
This
 could be seen
as a result
 that some people do not consider shopping as a domestic task anymore, in fact, it is seen as a
leisure
activity
.
This
 essay completely agrees that
this
 change in people’s perception is beneficial because it brings business opportunities as well as entertainment for the public. The
first
 reason why I think that considering shopping a hobby is constructive is
because
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 it opens the possibilities to a huge number of
entrepreneurships
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entrepreneurship
 to develop their businesses in an uptrend market.
This
 is to say, since presently shopping malls are more enjoyable places, the opportunities to take new products and services to these are higher than ever.
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, research carried out by
University
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the University
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 of Valley pointed out that during the
last
 decade, the amount of new businesses opened in Colombia is twice bigger in comparison with the past decade and
that is
 a consequence of the marketing campaigns aimed to change people’s perspective on shopping. Another reason why seeing shopping as a
leisure
activity
 is a positive trend is because it brings entertainment to
families
.
In other words
,
due
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 the significant growth of shopping
malls
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,malls
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 it could be considered as the perfect place to enjoy with
the
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loved ones. Indeed, based on a survey carried out by the Colombian Trading Agency, shopping is considered the
leisure
activity
 preferred by
the
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Colombian
families
. In conclusion, the fact that shopping is considered a
leisure
activity
instead
 of a domestic task has got positive implications since not only new businesses can have a
participation
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participate
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 in the market, but
also
families
 can have an enjoyable place to share incredible moments.
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