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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Undoubtedly, schools play a significant role in an individual's
life
. In
this
 regard, some people reckon that school's curriculum should cover
food
science
 in order to prepare students for the future.
However
, others believe that
courses
 related to
science
 are much more beneficial for children. As far as I am concerned,
food
science
 should be mandatory in institutions so as to encourage youngsters to have a healthy
life
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 From one point of view, the variety of
subjects
 that should be covered during the school years is extremely high. As a consequence, some institutions have to choose
science
 over art in order to prepare students for university admission tests or help them to find better careers.
In addition
, schools mostly have a tight budget for
courses
 so if the budget were to spend on the
food
 preparation course, schools would decrease the quality of education on important
subjects
, like math,
life
science
 and literacy. From another point of view, with the immense pressure coming from today's hectic
life
, more and more people forget the importance of a healthy diet.
Therefore
, if children get acquired with the nutritional value of foods and their positive effect on the body from
early
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 age, they will become more cautious about their wellness in their adulthood.
Furthermore
,
by
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 a growing population, the demand for professional chefs and experienced nutritionists are highly increased so culinary
courses
 could help students to find their interest in
food
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 sector and choose their future pathway.
Last
 but not least,
food
science
 can enhance the learning of other
subjects
.
For instance
, after spending hours on challenging
courses
, learners can get relaxed and forget all the stress by preparing
food
 which helps them to become more concentrated for
next
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subjects
.
Last
 but not least, with respect to the whole views mentioned above, it is essential that government allocate a huge amount of money for the
science
 of
food
 since it is not only lead them to a healthy lifestyle but
also
 can have a positive impact on their school progress.
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