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The position of women has changed a great deal in many societies over the past 50 years. But these societies cannot claim to have achieved gender equality. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Position of
women
 The
last
 5 decades marked several changes in
gender
 roles globally.
One
such
 example is the attitudes towards
gender
 differences in countries
such
 as America, Britain, Australia and Singapore. These may offer a stark contrast to other societies where
one
's
gender
 hinders a life choice. Two qualities that seem of great importance to the position of
women
 are the career paths available and the difference in treatment of different genders.
First
, there are pronounced differences between what work
women
 could do in the past and in the present. In conservative households and living environments,
women
 of the past would be expected to channel their energy into indoor activities or home-based activities.
For instance
, a typical day could include cleaning, cooking, looking after the children or sewing.
In contrast
, more job opportunities are available presently, be it in office-based settings or in heavy labour. A large contributory factor to
that is
 the openness and inclusion of employers considering the capabilities of an individual and not just
one
's
gender
. In many countries, men still form the majority of the nation's army.
However
, there has been a rise in
women
 employed in national security units, which was a lot less common 50 years ago. Another
signicant
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significant
 difference is the treatment
women
 receive from those around them. Up till recently, it seemed acceptable to question a woman's mood and behaviour and attribute it to a stereotype of the
gender
.
This
 outdated attitude indicates a lack of respect and understanding from other parties. It is important to celebrate the huge progress in employers' perspectives of hiring
women
 and
society
 accepting females in male-dominated positions.
However
,
one
 should
also
 consider what other differences lie in
society
.
For example
,
Indian
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society
 has a history of ruling in favour of men and perpetrators in cases of rape and abuse. In similar cases involving men and
women
, a notable number of countries would be hesitant to credit a victim or woman's testimony.
Additionally
,
Gender
 equality is not a goal but a status that needs to be maintained.
Thus
, I would contend that
society
 can not make a valid claim to 'achieve'
gender
 equality. After all, there is still more work to be done.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • historical context
  • gender pay gap
  • underrepresentation
  • leadership roles
  • gender-based violence
  • educational opportunities
  • workforce
  • legal reforms
  • statistics
  • case studies
  • global perspective
  • progressive changes
  • cultural differences
  • empowerment
  • patriarchy
  • systemic discrimination
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