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Every year several languages die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages. To what extent do u agree or disagree with this opinion.

#year #languages #people #life
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 of
languages
 will be disappeared each year. So, by some
people
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,people
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 it is argued that it will be extremely advantageous if there are remain
less
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fewer
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languages
 in the world. I fully support
this
 belief and give
reasons
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the reasons
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 below.
To begin
 with,
currently
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,currently
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 there are a lot of types of
languages
.
Furthermore
, particularly around the whole planet existing more than 150+ communications that in
fact
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,fact
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 every country has it is
national
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a national
the national
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 one.
Thus
, it is really difficult to manage good communication while travelling or even communicating in your own country with foreigners. So, if it will be disappearing
more
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less used
languages
 or ancient ones, it will be
incredibly
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an incredibly
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 valuable opportunity to speak in more common
languages
 and make more diplomatic connections without feeling any type of issue and problems.
On the other hand
, disappearing
languages
 make some difficulties to those people, that who use these
languages
 as the biggest part of their communications.
In addition
, excepting die out their communicational
languages
 they
also
 tend to lose their culture and their national holidays as well.
However
, it is mostly believed that with flowing the long times, populations could learn and except new
languages
 and as outstanding people said that, “The time makes you
to
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cover and forgot your all the problems” In my opinion,
as
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by
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 making the
languages
more
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apply
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fewer as possible as we could, we can communicate with others without any doubt and it can lead not only
communicating
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to communicating
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 but exchanging ideas,
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
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, and even start working more together than ever.
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  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Endangered languages
  • Homogenization
  • Multilingualism
  • Language preservation
  • Cognitive benefits
  • Global communication
  • Intellectual diversity
  • Ecological knowledge
  • Cultural traditions
  • Communication barriers
  • Preservation efforts
  • Technological solutions
  • Language revival
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