The use of violence in music lyrics, video games and films seen by children is causing concern in many societies. What problems may be caused by this type of violent imagery, and what steps could be taken to lessen the impact on young people?

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violence effects are not large, but they accumulate over time to produce significant changes in

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that can significantly influence both individuals and society. We will discuss the most serious problems, and

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two ways in which the situation can be improved. Arguably the gravest problem

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viewing (or playing) violent content is

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will act aggressively.

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who are exposed to multiple risk factors including substance abuse, aggression, and conflict at home -- and

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consume violent

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are more likely to behave aggressively. A

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serious impact is a risk factor for violent

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fact that the child gets to act out the violence, rather than

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be a passive observer, as when viewing television or movies, is especially concerning. To counteract these dangers, perhaps the most effective and most solution would be for

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should limit television to 1-2 hours daily and watch programs with their

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, enabling them to address any objectionable material seen. Another remedy may be physicians should make

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they should understand the risks of exposure to violence and teach

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how to interpret what they see on television. In doing so,

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may be increasingly able to discern which

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messages are suitable. In conclusion, in main problems are kids to be more

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and violent behavior. The key solution would be

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physicians should take some effective steps.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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247 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Desensitize
Aggressive behavior
Antisocial behavior
Bullying
Stress-related disorders
Media literacy
Critical evaluation
Age-appropriate media
Regulations
Public awareness campaigns
Responsible media consumption

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The use of violence in music lyrics, video games and films seen by children is causing concern in many societies. What problems may be caused by this type of violent imagery, and what steps could be taken to lessen the impact on young people?

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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?