The use of violence in music lyrics, video games and films seen by children is causing concern in many societies. What problems may be caused by this type of violent imagery, and what steps could be taken to lessen the impact on young people?

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violence effects are not large, but they accumulate over time to produce significant changes in
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that can significantly influence both individuals and society. We will discuss the most serious problems, and
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two ways in which the situation can be improved. Arguably the gravest problem
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viewing (or playing) violent content is
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will act aggressively.
Children
who are exposed to multiple risk factors including substance abuse, aggression, and conflict at home -- and
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consume violent
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are more likely to behave aggressively. A
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be a passive observer, as when viewing television or movies, is especially concerning. To counteract these dangers, perhaps the most effective and most solution would be for
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charge.
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Parents
should limit television to 1-2 hours daily and watch programs with their
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, enabling them to address any objectionable material seen. Another remedy may be physicians should make
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they should understand the risks of exposure to violence and teach
children
how to interpret what they see on television. In doing so,
children
may be increasingly able to discern which
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messages are suitable. In conclusion, in main problems are kids to be more
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and violent behavior. The key solution would be
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parents
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children
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physicians should take some effective steps.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Desensitize
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Antisocial behavior
  • Bullying
  • Stress-related disorders
  • Media literacy
  • Critical evaluation
  • Age-appropriate media
  • Regulations
  • Public awareness campaigns
  • Responsible media consumption
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