A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as the main source of income.unfortunately tourism can also be a source of problems if not managed properly. do you think the benefits of tourism outweigh its disdvantages

Man is advent by nature and he is always
eger
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eager
to explore new places
Initially
,
this
movement was just for the search of bread and butter, but later
on
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it was followed by trade and communications.There are many
countries
in
this
world
which
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are totally dependent on
tourism
. Many people believe that
tourism
has more disadvantages in comparison to advantages and it can lead to more problems if not managed
propertly
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properly
. I accord the said statement and the reasons for the same will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
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the
first
supporting
nreason
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reason
for my viewpoint is that if a region is dependent on visitors for its earnings
then
, the economy of
that
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that state will not be stable and can crash easily. In
such
a situation
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is not an easy task.
For example
countries
like Thailand and Greece are totally dependent on
tourism
and were
worst
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hit during the pandemic.
This
, it can be
clealy
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clearly
said that these
countries
have very volatile economies.
Second
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reason to support my viewpoint is that as people from different
countries
visit there so, they are getting away from their cultures and traditions. Local people there just go with the flow and they are attracted towards the
cutures
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cultures
of different regions.
For instance
, they make changes in their houses, dresses, ascent and so on as per the needs of the customer.
Hence
, it can be said that these
countries
are getting away from their own culture. In the
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I will
sumup
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sum up
by saying that there are more disadvantages in comparison to advantages of
tourism
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countries
and these are worst affected by global circumstances
blike
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like
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pandemics and recession.
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