A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as the main source of income.unfortunately tourism can also be a source of problems if not managed properly. do you think the benefits of tourism outweigh its disdvantages

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Man is advent by nature and he is always

eger

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eager

to explore new places

Initially

this

movement was just for the search of bread and butter, but later

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it was followed by trade and communications.There are many

countries

this

world

which

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that

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are totally dependent on

tourism

. Many people believe that

tourism

has more disadvantages in comparison to advantages and it can lead to more problems if not managed

propertly

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properly

. I accord the said statement and the reasons for the same will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.

To begin

with

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the

first

supporting

nreason

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reason

for my viewpoint is that if a region is dependent on visitors for its earnings

then

, the economy of

that

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apply

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that state will not be stable and can crash easily. In

such

a situation

policy making

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policymaking

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is not an easy task.

For example

countries

like Thailand and Greece are totally dependent on

tourism

and were

worst

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the worst

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hit during the pandemic.

This

, it can be

clealy

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clearly

said that these

countries

have very volatile economies.

Second

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reason to support my viewpoint is that as people from different

countries

visit there so, they are getting away from their cultures and traditions. Local people there just go with the flow and they are attracted towards the

cutures

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cultures

of different regions.

For instance

, they make changes in their houses, dresses, ascent and so on as per the needs of the customer.

Hence

, it can be said that these

countries

are getting away from their own culture. In the

end

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I will

sumup

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sum up

by saying that there are more disadvantages in comparison to advantages of

tourism

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countries

and these are worst affected by global circumstances

blike

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bike

pandemics and recession.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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economic boost
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cultural understanding
global awareness
infrastructure development
environmental degradation
habitat destruction
resource depletion
cultural erosion
foreign influences
overcrowding
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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as the main source of income.unfortunately tourism can also be a source of problems if not managed properly. do you think the benefits of tourism outweigh its disdvantages

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