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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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In recent times, it has become extremely expensive to own a property. With the rise in demand, the prices are
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 high in some prime cities around the world. Individuals are considering leasing a
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 of purchasing.
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, a person can find residence closer to his/her
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 of work so that it is easy to commute. It can open doors to plenty of career options. Having a permanent home, limit the options for the people as they are unwilling to travel long distances for their jobs. Some folks tend to reject the offer when they find that it might take more than 3 hours to reach the office premises.
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, with fixed monthly deductions, they can plan their expenses in a better manner so that they don't lose their savings in one go and can find their space at affordable rates that fit their budget.
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, families have the liberty to shift if they find the
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 to be inconvenient.
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, some might not find it pleasant to not a have permanent
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 to live. In a situation of financial instability, owning a
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 can give a sense of security.
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, investing in real estate is a great investment as there is very
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 chance that the price would go down. Some get frustrated with frequent movement from one
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 to another. They want to have a house with lawns and swings so that they can relax and their kids can play. Some are ready to travel long distances but prefer a big mansion in the suburbs.
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, there can be situations where renting a
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 at a preferred location may not be that budget-friendly. In the conclusion, there can be numerous benefits in owning a house but renting provides better flexibility and
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 it saves some precious time that can be spent with their loved ones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial commitment
  • down payment
  • initial costs
  • allocate resources
  • maintenance costs
  • mobility
  • relocate
  • market fluctuations
  • property value
  • building equity
  • appreciate in value
  • asset
  • personalization
  • restrictions
  • rental increases
  • lease renewal
  • financial instability
  • housing budgets
  • long-term security
  • landlord
  • lease agreement
  • equity
  • substantial
  • property ownership
  • property market
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