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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
people
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 believe that parents of children who attend private
schools
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 should not need to contribute to state
schools
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 through taxes. Personally, I completely disagree with
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 view. For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to reduce taxes for families who pay for private
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.
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, it would be difficult to calculate the correct amount of
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 reduction for these families, and staff would be required to manage
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, we all pay a certain amount of
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 for public services that we may not use.
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, most
people
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 are fortunate enough not to have to call the police or fire brigade at any time in their lives, but they would not expect a
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 reduction for
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.
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, if wealthy families were given a
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 discount for sending their children to private
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, we might have a situation where poorer
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 pay higher taxes than the rich. In my opinion, we should all be happy to pay our share of the money that supports public
schools
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. It is beneficial for all members of society to have a
high quality
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education
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 system with equal opportunities for all young
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.
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 will result in a well-educated workforce
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 and in turn a more productive and prosperous nation. Parents of children in private
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 may
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 see the advantages of
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 in their own lives.
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 and competent staff, and a
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education
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 system can provide
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 employees. In conclusion, I do not believe that any financial concessions should be made for
people
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 who choose private
education
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.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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