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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 advanced world, there are getting more and more universities and different level of schools change their teaching model from school learning to video teaching. While there are some positive outcomes that only learning through Internet can have, I still strongly believe that learning face-to-face is the most effective and best way for
students
. On the one hand, you just need to find a place
where
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 has equipped with nice-connected wi-fi,
then
, you can start learning through a laptop or a smartphone. It is suitable for
students
 who
getting
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 sick, but do not want to study behind other classmates.
For example
,
since
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the new coronavirus outbreak is continuing to grow. There are many countries
prevent
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 infected children from ceasing their courses,
thus
, teachers teach the lesson through the Internet at home.
Nevertheless
, there are more pros to learning in the physical classroom than on the net.
Firstly
,
students
 can interact with teachers and their classmates when learning at school,
this
 may help children to develop interpersonal skills.
Secondly
, it is not affordable for every family to buy an
electronical
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electronic
 device. If a computer or a smartphone is necessary, it will cause
a
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huge stress for some parents.
Finally
, schools have
the
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playground and
sport
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 fields
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 let
students
 run or have fun with their classmates. It will make children develop motor skills
instead
 of forming
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 lifestyle. In conclusion, both learning means can make our life more comfortable. It seems to me that the disadvantages of distance learning outweigh the advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled flexibility
  • democratizes education
  • geographically isolated
  • personal circumstances
  • cost-effectiveness
  • accommodation
  • commuting
  • self-motivated learning
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • direct interaction
  • feelings of isolation
  • quality and recognition
  • inferior
  • technical issues
  • digital divide
  • reliable technology
  • underprivileged
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