Your workplace does not have a parking area for cars and it causing some problems. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, you should: describe the problems explain why they should solve the problems and give your suggestion on how to solve the problems.

Dear Mr Andrew, I am writing
this
letter to bring to your attention that our
shop
does not have any parking area for cars.
This
problem has very significant meaning and can negatively influence our sales level. In my perspective,
this
problem should be solved immediately, because our customers always complain about
this
.
Furthermore
, sometimes, some of them do not enter the
shop
because they cannot find the parking place near the
shop
. Should be pointed out that a new
shop
with the same items as us will be open
next
month at the
next
crossroad from our
shop
. When
this
shop
will be opened it will have 3 parking places.
Therefore
, if we did not change the situation,
this
new
shop
would have a big advantage over us. If you check the city map, you can find some empty area behind our
shop
, which is available for rent. If we rented
this
territory, we could solve
this
problem.
In addition
, we can provide some navigation, in order to help our customers find
this
parking place. You sincerely, Bim Bom
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