It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they use to be. Give some reason why this is change has happened and suggest how family could be brought together.

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it is been common that
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each and every family
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lack of communication when compared with some
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back in the past. The major cause for
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problem is digitalization and every single person is occupied with some
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the internet there are numerous reasons people to stick to the digital world it could be the office work for adults, assignments for children etc even for the entertainment we mostly use online games and web series literally all we could
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one single phone and good wifi connection so to overcome
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problem we must take some
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from our busy lives to spend some
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while having our dinner and play some
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family mentally
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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