Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table chart presents the proportion of Unemployed activities for about one year. Overall, it can be seen that the top three activities for males were found the jobs, shopping and housework by 22%, 20% and 19% respectively in the morning. Meanwhile,
Women
spent their
time
with housework, shopping and job hunting by 49%, 26% and 16% respectively in a similar
time
. By
the
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contrast, Drinking was not a very popular activity for men and
women
in the morning. According to the table chart, Men spent their leisure
time
in the
afternoon
watching TV by 14% followed by Gardening, Visiting friends and Job hunting with the nearby share. While
women
think that housework was the productive activity in the
afternoon
with 21%.
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popular activity was still shopping.
Additionally
, Females did not like to stay in the bed and play sports at that
time
. In conclusion, more
women
than men went shopping in the morning and
afternoon
. As
,
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fewer females than males went gardening in the morning and
afternoon
.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Pattern
  • Fluctuation
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Comparison
  • Relationship
  • Correlation
  • Significant
  • Implication
  • Prediction
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