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Nowadays, people are using internet for getting information on goods and services. What do you think are advantages overweight disadvantages?

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Everything undergoes a sea of change over a period of time were talking about shopping, Introduction of online shopping has offered faster smarter and batter life to masses with few repercussions,
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 I positives ofo shopping are superior to its negatives and the
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 reasons for my inclination are enunciated in ensuing paragraphs.
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 with, the Internet is the astonishing invention of mankind that has facilitated humans in each and every aspect of human life. The days are gone when
people
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 had to commute to shops and malls for the purpose of shopping as
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 can pursue online shopping over the clock along with mobility.
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,
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 nowadays, access Another relevant argument that justifies my perception is that online shopping has proven fructuous to working professionals who are working from dawn to dusk in the blind run behind aggressive materialization could save there ample amount of time by pursuing online shopping say
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 nowadays working women are able to manage the balance between personal and professional life where online shopping played a vital role. On the flip side,
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 online shopping has its obvious benefits, excessive exposure to Internet has made
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 techno-savvy, not only that lack of face-to-face communication among the masses results in a self-centric society.
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, attractive displays of products and the temptation of offers and discounts lead to overbuying,
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 the consumers ending up squandering their money.
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, it accounts for unemployed businessmen. On the close scrutiny, I conclude that ”necessity the mother of inventions.” Where innovation of internet shopping has availed batter lifestyle to citizens and is gaining grounds irrespective of its drawbacks.
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