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Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reason, some jobs are better done by men and others by women. Do you agree or disagree?

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Even in
this
 modern stage of mankind's history, there are some people who believe job positions should be divided by gender and
men
 or
women
 have limited, specified abilities that are not in the other sex. I contend that
this
 cliche needs to be stopped once forever.
Firstly
, the various experiences in history showed us that there are so many
men
 ad
women
 that can go through society's dictated rules and become even better than the dominated gender in that occupation. One of the most common instances is how
men
 became great and excellent chefs while the society stereotypes claimed cooking is a female job and
men
 should not take it as an occupation.
Moreover
, there are great names of
women
 in male-dominated jobs like being a judge, astronaut, etc.
Secondly
,limiting people by demonstrating typical rules for them controls the unseen abilities and stops them from exposing. As if Maryam Mirzakhani one of the greatest mathematicians in her times, had accepted society's mindset about
women
, she would never make that phenomenon in the science of mathematics. So in order to not lose the chance of having these phenomenons, there should be an equal and unisex perspective on occupations and abilities. By way of conclusion, I again insist on the miracle of the human's body
that is
 never predictable and should not be generalised. There should be equal chances for both sexes from childhood to find their capabilities and wishes and not be judged for what they decided to do or be in their future life.
Submitted by haniyeh.maghbooli.1992 on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate
  • biological differences
  • characteristics
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • equal opportunities
  • gender biases
  • fair representation
  • skills
  • qualifications
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