In some Vinhomes areas, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Fastfood

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Fast food

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, prepared

meals

and sugary

drink

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drinks

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were sold in many shops not only in Vinhomes area but

also

in the street, in supermarkets and

in convenient

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inconvenient

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shops with cheaper prices. Fast

food

and prepared

food

are very convenient for busy people who are living in hustle lifestyle. They tend to spend more time at work and outdoor activities than at home. To save time, they often choose

fastfood

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fast food

and prepared

food

for their

meals

. With lower prices than in the past, fast

food

also

a way to save money for young people who need to spend

much

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a lot of

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money

for

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learning and social activities.

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the other hand, fast

food

and prepared

food

as well as sugary

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, as well as sugary drink,

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drink

are not good for health if they are eaten frequently or

large

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in large

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amount

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amounts

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. There is

much saturated

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much-saturated

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fat in fast

food

that is

dangerous for the heart. There is

also

much sugar or

carbonhydrate

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carbohydrate

carbohydrates

in fast

food

and sugary

drink

thay

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that

is risky for

diabete

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diabetes

, kidney diseases and metabolic diseases.

Moreover

, fast

food

, prepared

meals

and sugary

drink

are not good for children.

Absortion

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Absorption

Abortion

these foods and drinks can cause obesity in children which affects their

physcical

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physical

and

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mental

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metal

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mental

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health and their ability of learning. Some preservation substances in prepared foods can be harmful

for

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developing

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apply

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the brain in children. Inclusion, fast

food

, prepared

meals

and sugaring drinks are convenient in some way for our busy living today. We can save time and money with these foods but we

also

can put our health

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risk if we overuse

these

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this food

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food

without control.

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In some Vinhomes areas, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

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Health services are a basic necessity. However, private companies have made them quite costly for ordinary individuals. Do the advantages of private health care outweigh its disadvantages?

The title "I had to show courage." Describe a circumstance where you had to exercise courage. What action of yours required a lot of bravery? Afterwards, did you feel proud of yourself? How did your surroundings respond?

We should fix the traffic and transportation by making everyone lives in the cities not suburbs or countrysides. What to extent do you agree or disagree?

'People who do not use social media networks* will always fall behind in career development opportunities.' To what extent do you feel that this is an accurate and important prediction? * Social media networks = messaging and information exchange systems such as Facebook and Twitter.

Too much emphasis to given for education of the young. More government money should be spent to free time activity of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?