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In some Vinhomes areas, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Fastfood
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Fast food
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, prepared
meals
 and sugary
drink
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drinks
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 were sold in many shops not only in Vinhomes area but
also
 in the street, in supermarkets and
in convenient
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inconvenient
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 shops with cheaper prices. Fast
food
 and prepared
food
 are very convenient for busy people who are living in hustle lifestyle. They tend to spend more time at work and outdoor activities than at home. To save time, they often choose
fastfood
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fast food
 and prepared
food
 for their
meals
. With lower prices than in the past, fast
food
 is
also
 a way to save money for young people who need to spend
much
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a lot of
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 money
for
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 learning and social activities.
In
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 the other hand, fast
food
 and prepared
food
as well as sugary
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, as well as sugary drink,
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drink
 are not good for health if they are eaten frequently or
large
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in large
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amount
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amounts
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. There is
much saturated
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much-saturated
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 fat in fast
food
that is
 dangerous for the heart. There is
also
 much sugar or
carbonhydrate
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carbohydrate
carbohydrates
 in fast
food
 and sugary
drink
thay
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that
 is risky for
diabete
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diabetes
, kidney diseases and metabolic diseases.
Moreover
, fast
food
, prepared
meals
 and sugary
drink
 are not good for children.
Absortion
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Absorption
Abortion
 these foods and drinks can cause obesity in children which affects their
physcical
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physical
 and
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mental
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metal
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mental
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 health and their ability of learning. Some preservation substances in prepared foods can be harmful
for
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to
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 developing
of
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apply
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the brain in children. Inclusion, fast
food
, prepared
meals
 and sugaring drinks are convenient in some way for our busy living today. We can save time and money with these foods but we
also
 can put our health
in
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at
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 risk if we overuse
these
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this food
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food
 without control.
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