Young people today spend too much money and time following fashion trends (clothing, tech). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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generation is
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more
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trends like clothing and
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technology
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would like to share my views on the topic. as per my view, spending
money
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fashion
goods and technology is not
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good
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the younger generation. it
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effects
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them
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many ways In the 21st
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century
, youngsters are running behind the
fashion
trends they are more addicted to western
life
as they are moving around the pubs and
fashion
clothing. Especially Indian youngsters are not following our
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culture
and traditions. it proves that future generations will change the trend of
life
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will not
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the
way
running
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behind
the western
culture
like pubs and wasting more
money
. the current generation students are not concentrating on their
career
they are not studying properly. They are wasting more
money
on enjoyment
it
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leads
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career
path
wrong
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. Especially rich kids are taking steps towards the western
culture
life
. They will get more
money
from parents and
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that in different ways. To
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sum up
, younger
speding
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spending
more
money
on
fashion
trends like pubs
culture
and purchasing
western style
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clothes
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cloths
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and learning new technologies all these
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their
life
and
career
path towards the wrong path. Parents should teach them how to use
money
in
right
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way
and saving
money
leads good
life
and
career
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-expression
  • peer pressure
  • social media influence
  • financial stability
  • fast fashion
  • consumerism
  • social validation
  • fear of missing out (FOMO)
  • cultural shifts
  • marketing strategies
  • environmental sustainability
  • thrift shopping
  • do-it-yourself (DIY)
  • economic impact
  • sustainable practices
  • upcycling
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