In some Vinhomes areas, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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I think

this

is a positive development.

This

change give Vinhomes

residents

more options in their daily shopping, they don't have to go far to buy their common grocery. In the modern fast pace way of life,

people

are normally tired when they are home from work. It is a relief for many

residents

to not have the

preasure

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pleasure

pressure

of cooking and have

food

easily accessible in their residential area.

Furthermore

especialy

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especially

in the current Covid-19 pandemic, not

have

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having

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to travel far for

food

is an excellent way to prevent exposure to the virus.

This

can

also

lead to the reduction of medical

cost

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costs

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for the healthcare system.

is the matter of cost, lower price is always better for the consumer. Many

people

are affected financially by the pandemic,

people

lose jobs, incomes get

reduce

Wrong verb form

reduced

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. Lower

food

price is a great way to support them overcoming

this

horrible pandemic.

Moreover

, lower price increases demand

for

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apply

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goods,

people

buy

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buying

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more will stimulate the economy and help small independent sellers.

On the other hand

, in the perspective of a healthcare profession, having more processed

food

and sugary drinks more readily accessible can lead to

the

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apply

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detrimental

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detriment

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apply

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health for

residents

. But I think the

benifits

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benefits

far

outweight

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outweigh

the cost and

this

development is the right direction to move forward. Having more convenience shops and lower prices for

food

and grocery can help improve the quality of life for Vinhomes

residents

greatly.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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240 words

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In some Vinhomes areas, fast food, prepared meals, and sugary drinks are now sold in more shops and at lower prices than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Shopping is the favourite pastime of most of the young people. Why is this the case? Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities in their free time?

Some people think that success in life coms from hard work and determination, while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearance. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. What are the advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles?

Some people prefer to go to health clubs and gyms for health care, some say the walking and climbing stairs are more effective. Discuss both vies and give your opinion.