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Young people often copy the behaviour of adults, so all employees of VinGroup should only be allowed to eat healthy food or drink and should not encourage unhealthy habits such as smoking. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days, youth tend to imitate adults, especially influential
people
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. Some
people
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 think that Vingroup should prohibit their employees from eating unhealthy foods as well as bad habits like smoking. In my opinion, I believe that encouraging
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 to get good practice to set an example for young
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 is a good thing, but it is important to emphasize the role of education. On the one hand, I think the adults use safe food not only to set an example for
children
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 but
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 to protect their own
health
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. Bad food can be mentioned as fast food containing a lot of sugar and fat
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 harmful to human
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.
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, smoking is the leading cause of lung cancer, we should avoid being safe as well as create good habits for
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.
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, it is the parents' responsibility to teach their
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 some skills and vital thinking about
behavior
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. They need to be educated about the importance of their
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 and how to protect it
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 of just looking at others. When they understand it, they will practice better and behave safer. In conclusion,I think that adults
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 as the employees of Vingroup should be aware of their role models for young
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 in good practice.
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, we
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 need to give
children
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 a good education about
health
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 and life so that they can self- perceive and develop.

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