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Young people often copy the behaviour of adults, so all employees of VinGroup should only be allowed to eat healthy food or drink and should not encourage unhealthy habits such as smoking. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days, youth tend to imitate adults, especially influential
people
. Some
people
 think that Vingroup should prohibit their employees from eating unhealthy foods as well as bad habits like smoking. In my opinion, I believe that encouraging
people
 to get good practice to set an example for young
people
 is a good thing, but it is important to emphasize the role of education. On the one hand, I think the adults use safe food not only to set an example for
children
 but
also
 to protect their own
health
. Bad food can be mentioned as fast food containing a lot of sugar and fat
that is
 harmful to human
health
.
Besides
, smoking is the leading cause of lung cancer, we should avoid being safe as well as create good habits for
children
.
On the other hand
, it is the parents' responsibility to teach their
children
 some skills and vital thinking about
behavior
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. They need to be educated about the importance of their
health
 and how to protect it
instead
 of just looking at others. When they understand it, they will practice better and behave safer. In conclusion,I think that adults
such
 as the employees of Vingroup should be aware of their role models for young
people
 in good practice.
However
, we
also
 need to give
children
 a good education about
health
 and life so that they can self- perceive and develop.
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