The international community has asked the public to act immediately on reduction of fossil fuel consumption. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The modern
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life has relied on fossil
fuels
like coal, oil and natural gas which are the primary source of energy in the world. Many experts from
international
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the international
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board are emphasizing the solution to the consequences of
climate
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the climate
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crisis because of fossil
fuels
consumption. The international community should make the awareness of public how to reduce the usage of fossil fuel.
In
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this
point, I strongly agree with
this
view.
Firstly
, we should encourage
public
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the public
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to decrease fossil fuel consumption by means of our planet
healthiness
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. Obviously, it can be seen that every part of the world has been using these and
fuels
production industries across the globe
have
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go
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through high demands. Growing fossil
fuels
consumptions have led to the emission of greenhouse gases
such
as carbon dioxide, methane, nitrous oxide which are the major drives of climate and environmental damage. It is definitely lead to
the
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impact on agricultural and food security.
Moreover
, global warming and air pollution levels have
increase
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day by day
that is
a threat to our planet and our existence. As long as
human
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humans
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kept emitting any amount of greenhouse gases,
temperature
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the temperature
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would keep going up.
Secondly
, scientists have been discovering
the
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apply
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alternative energy source to replace fossil
fuels
and they are implementing the systems and technologies to use solar and wind power efficiently and effectively.
Additionally
, the electric car can be deployed as well as it is protecting the environment by releasing greenhouse gases.
In
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the other
hands
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hand
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, saving
fossil
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fossils
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is not only saving for the future development of our countries but
also
for the upcoming generation.
Consequently
, they would not face the consequences of insufficient energy resources from underground. To sum up, governments and international communities should steer and speed up to explore more alternative energies and the replacement machines for transportations.
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