More young people spend less time on their weekends and holidays to do activities outdoors in a natural environment. What are the reasons? What might encourage young people to do outdoor activities?

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number of
youth
, they
choose
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to
spent
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spend
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more
time
to stay
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home on
weekend
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weekends
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or holidays and
spent
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spend
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less
time
to do
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outdoor
activities
. Personally, science and technology developed in the world that makes many indoor
activities
which is video games, mobile games, television or international and parent busy at work.
Parents
and
schools
are
the
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important
role
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to encourage
youth
to outdoor and connect natural environment, they can help
youth
to do outdoor
activities
. Nowadays, science and technology
gives
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young
people
different life. Young
people
attracted
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are attracted
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by distinct games and TV shows.
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, many
game
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games
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are own same target which
is make
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makes
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young
people
to
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apply
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challenge
highest
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levels and get awards.
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, television plays series which make
they
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want to know the ending cause
them
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continue
watch
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and shows which interesting make them laugh.
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,
Parent
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spent less
time
for
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youth
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the youth
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. Many
parents
are busy at work, so they
were have
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no
time
to accompany their children, and children usually stay home by them-self.
therefore
,
youth
like to go indoor
activities
more than outdoor
activities
.
However
,
parents
and
schools
should encourage and help young
people
to do outdoor
activities
. Young
people
like to natural environment
activities
or not depend on
parents
and
schools
, if they can cause their interested which is
parents
arrange weekend
activities
such
as
bush walk
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bushwalk
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, swimming, climb mountain and
schools
can organize camping or small trip. In doing so,
youth
have
other choice
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another choice
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, they will not just stay home. In conclusion, young
people
can
spent
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more
time
in outdoor
activities
but may need someone to help and guide them.
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