More young people spend less time on their weekends and holidays to do activities outdoors in a natural environment. What are the reasons? What might encourage young people to do outdoor activities?
Recently,
increasing
number of Add an article
an increasing
youth
, they choose
to Wrong verb form
chosen
spent
more Change the verb
spend
time
to stay
home on Change the verb form
staying
weekend
or holidays and Fix the agreement mistake
weekends
spent
less Wrong verb form
spend
time
to do
outdoor Change the verb form
doing
activities
. Personally, science and technology developed in the world that makes many indoor activities
which is video games, mobile games, television or international and parent busy at work. Parents
and schools
are the
important Correct article usage
an
role
to encourage Change the noun form
roles
youth
to outdoor and connect natural environment, they can help youth
to do outdoor activities
.
Nowadays, science and technology gives
young Change the verb form
give
people
different life. Young people
attracted
by distinct games and TV shows. Add a missing verb
are attracted
For example
, many game
are own same target which Change to a plural noun
games
is make
young Change the verb form
makes
people
to
challenge Change the verb form
apply
highest
levels and get awards. Correct article usage
the highest
In addition
, television plays series which make they
want to know the ending cause Correct pronoun usage
them
them
continue Change the pronoun
they
watch
and shows which interesting make them laugh. Add the particle
to watch
Moreover
, Parent
spent less Fix the agreement mistake
Parents
time
for
Change preposition
with
youth
. Many Correct article usage
the youth
parents
are busy at work, so they were have
no Change the verb form
had
time
to accompany their children, and children usually stay home by them-self. therefore
, youth
like to go indoor activities
more than outdoor activities
.
However
, parents
and schools
should encourage and help young people
to do outdoor activities
. Young people
like to natural environment activities
or not depend on parents
and schools
, if they can cause their interested which is parents
arrange weekend activities
such
as bush walk
, swimming, climb mountain and Correct your spelling
bushwalk
schools
can organize camping or small trip. In doing so, youth
have other choice
, they will not just stay home.
In conclusion, young Change the wording
another choice
other choices
people
can spent
more Change the verb form
spend
time
in outdoor activities
but may need someone to help and guide them.Submitted by Nikky on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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