TRAFFIC AND ACCOMMODATION PROBLEMS ARE INCREASING, AND THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD ENCOURAGE BUSINESS TO MOVE FROM CITIES TO RURAL AREAS. DO THE ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGE

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The government ought to motivate
business
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businesses
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to be moved from urban
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to rural regions.
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is needed to meet the increasing problems of traffic and accommodation in cities. It will
increase
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employment opportunities and other facilities for villagers. It,
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, will cause
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and loss of natural beauty of
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the countryside
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. In my opinion, its detrimental effects take precedence over its benefits.
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number of businesses in rural regions will result in rising employment chances for the native people because corporations will need to recruit workers to run their businesses.
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will eliminate unemployment in the long run.
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,
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will provide a variety of facilities to the villagers,
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as recreational activities, residential societies, better educational institutions and good hospitals.
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, new companies will not only
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jobs but
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provide enormous amenities to the inhabitants of rural
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.
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,
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innovative approach has significant drawbacks. All kinds of
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,
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, water, land, air and noise
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, in the countryside will have
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impact on the lives of all living beings. It will have adverse effects on humans as well as on animals and plants.
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, carbon emissions will
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increase
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global warming and rising temperature problems. Simultaneously, huge business projects will clear land by deforestation to build offices, houses or other buildings.
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will deprive rural
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of the natural scenery. In conclusion,
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arrival
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the arrival
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of more businesses in rural
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will enhance
availability
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the availability
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of jobs and facilities for the locals,
pollution
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will
increase
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in villages and
natural
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landscape will be lost.
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,
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merits are overshadowed by its demerits.
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