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TRAFFIC AND ACCOMMODATION PROBLEMS ARE INCREASING, AND THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD ENCOURAGE BUSINESS TO MOVE FROM CITIES TO RURAL AREAS. DO THE ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGE

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Many
areas
 have been urbanised and many
people
 moved to the city, simultaneously, heavy traffic and accommodation problems are caused.
Therefore
, some
people
 argue the government has to move
businesses
 from cities to rural
areas
. In my opinion, these detrimental effects take precedence over their benefits. Admittedly, the increase of
businesses
 in rural
areas
 will result in many advantages for native dwellers.
To begin
 with, those corporations will recruit more
people
 in rural
areas
 as workers to run their
businesses
.
Thus
,
this
 will eliminate the lack of job opportunities in the countryside, and the supplied jobs will lead to a better market economy.
Furthermore
,
this
 will provide advanced facilities and services,
such
 as faster internet connection, hospitals and better education institutions to meet the demand for the increase of employees.
Consequently
, the rural regions can be developed and residents will be provided with not only more job chances but
also
 better amenities.
On the other hand
,
this
 movement contains some significant drawbacks. During the process of construction and householding, many wastes that can destroy the environment is produced.
Thus
, various kinds of pollution,
for instance
, air, water, and land pollution will exert a negative influence on
people
 in the countryside. It has a negative effect not only on
people
 but
also
 on animals and plants.
In addition
, deforestation and cultivation are necessary for land
that is
 used for constructing buildings and facilities.
Therefore
, the natural scenery and the environment will be ruined simultaneously. In conclusion,
although
 the countryside can be advanced with the movement of many
businesses
, I believe the environment of the field will be destroyed by
this
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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