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Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. Excessive use of private cars is considered to be the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities and that's why the use of public transportation is encouraged. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

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Transportation
 is playing an important role in every nation's development process and
this
 is an important aspect of our life for mobility. Some people believe that
private
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 car is the best mean of
transportation
 while others say that public
transport
service
 should be used for
this
 purpose.
However
, as far as I am concerned, I firmly agree that public
transport
service
 should be our main
mean
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means
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 of
transportation
. The advantages and demerits of using public
transportation
 are discussed in
this
 essay. The very
first
 advantage of using public
transportation
service
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services
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 is that
it
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they
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 reduced the burning of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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. We all know that fuels like petrol and diesel take
million
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millions
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 of years to make.
Therefore
 if we do not decrease the usage level of these fuels
then
 in future it will be diminished. So to make sure that it will not happen in future, we need to save these fuels as much as possible. The very
first
 step towards it is the usage of public
transport
service
. Since
a
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public
transportation
 can carry a large number of passengers it reduced the overall fuel consumption.
Thus
 it helps to reduce
the
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apply
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air and environmental
pollutions
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pollution
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.
Secondly
, more pollution will be generated if we opt to use private
cars
 for
transportation
. The more personal
cars
 on the road, the more pollution
it
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they
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 will generate. So if we use bus or train for roaming
then
 we can fulfil our part to decrease the environmental pollutions.
Further
,
transportation
 cost is cheaper in the case of public
transportation
. Another aspect is the accident risk. In private
cars
, the probability of
accident
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accidents
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 on road has increased dramatically.
Last
 but not least, public
transportation
 increases your social contacts. Your social life will scatter with the use of government
transport
service
. Every coin has two sides and
that is
 true for the usage of public
transportation
 as well.
Firstly
, public buses or trains take more time to travel to
some place
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someplace
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. It does not take any shortcuts and
also
 runs
in
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at
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limited
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a limited
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 speed.
On the other hand
, with a private car, you can go to any place in a very short time.
Secondly
, public
transport
service
 is limited. One has to make sure that he/she has the timetable of public buses or trains. If one does not have
timing
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a timing
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 record,
then
 it generates some hurdles for the travellers. There is little privacy on public
transportation
 and you can’t relax in a crammed public bus or train. All in all, I would conclude by saying that public
transport
service
 has more advantages than its disadvantages.
Further
, I like to suggest that buses or trains should
our
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be our
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 main
transportation
 types. Private
cars
 should be used for urgent needs only.
Otherwise
, public
transportations
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transportation
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 should be used. It will save our environment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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