Traffic and accommodation problems are increasing and government should encourage some businesses to move from cities to rural areas. Does the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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An increasing number of vehicles and buildings is overwhelming so some
businesses
are being encouraged to relocate their offices to somewhere less crowded.
Although
I tend towards the viewpoint that relocation will solve
this
controversial problem
but
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this
solution will cause some inconveniences and disadvantages for both customers and companies. On the one hand, relocation can help the ururbanizationroblem. The shortage of jobs along with young
people
's need to pursue a career
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are the two main reasons for rural depopulation. Moving
businesses
from crowded places to rural ones will balance workforces between
cities
and countrysides, which helps urban
areas
not be overpopulated from migration. Another benefit of relocation some
businesses
is traffic congestion.
People
will tend to use public transportation
instead
of their private cars for longer destinations to save the
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cost.
This
also
prevents car accidents after a frustrating working day when
people
are very tired and do not
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suited
for driving.
On the other hand
, moving between urban
areas
and non-urban
areas
will cause some inconveniences for
people
who already live in
cities
. Changing their workplaces
also
means young
people
probably have to change their lifestyles for young
people
,
such
as their daily routines. But
people
with families will have to move to rural
areas
to live as a family with lower living conditions, which is not easy to give up.
Moreover
, some
businesses
like service companies will have some troubles while moving from
cities
because most of their potential is in big
cities
.
People
in urban
areas
need more services compared to rural ones
such
as health care, restaurants, technologiefurniturefurniture. In conclusion, it seems to me disadvantages of moving
businesses
between
cities
and ruraoutweighareas will outweigh the advantages it brings due to previous reasons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic development
  • Capital infusion
  • Job opportunities
  • Standard of living
  • Urban overcrowding
  • Quality of life
  • Housing pressure
  • Healthcare pressure
  • Disruption
  • Deforestation
  • Pollution
  • Financial burden
  • Smaller companies
  • Infrastructure deficiencies
  • Sophisticated infrastructure
  • High-speed internet
  • Robust transportation networks
  • Modern amenities
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