Social media is becoming increasingly popular among all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the current society, technology using become the most
importance
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in each individual's life,
such
as social
media
,becoming increasingly popular among all
generation
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.
however
, sharing personal information on social
media
websites
also
have risks. Overall, I intend to consider that the advantages of social
media
outweigh the disadvantages. Admittedly, Social
media
is one of the most important technology products that all
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people
are using, especially among teenagers and
grown ups
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.
For instance
, lot of apps,
such
as billboards,
people
can listen to music on the way to work or home for relaxing themselves, checking breaking news on the
first
second
from all over the world, publishing their own opinion or
their own arts product
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the product of their own art
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for sharing with
people
on youtube or
instergram
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Instagram
. Some of them even become popular through youtube or
instergrams
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Instagram
,
benifiting
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benefiting
both producers and viewers.
However
, there are
also
some risks among
the
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social
media
if
people
are over-exploded themselves on
internet
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the internet
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.
For example
, some hackers may use some
individual's
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individuals'
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personal information to hack their bank account ,
consquently
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consequently
,
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will have
finical
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loss.
In addition
, if
people
shared some personal opinion but major viewers have different comments,they might risk internet bullying, hurting their family,
neverthless
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nevertheless
, causing mental issues. To conclude,
though
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there will be some risks while sharing personal information on social
media
. the trend in the current society is social
media
.
people
shall take care which they want to share on some social
communcation
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communication
tools and they have to be mentally ready
what
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to do if they have to face different voices from social
media
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social media platforms
  • Connectivity
  • Self-expression
  • Creativity
  • Global communication
  • Instantaneous communication
  • Personal growth
  • Career advancement
  • Privacy concerns
  • Identity theft
  • Cyberbullying
  • Addiction
  • Productivity
  • Misinformation
  • Crisis
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