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ANIMAL SPECIES ARE BECOMING EXTINCT DUE TO HUMAN ACTIVITIES ON LAND AND IN SEA. DISCUSS THE REASONS AND SOLUTIONS

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Extinction
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 of
animals
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have
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 become a very concerning situation in our world. Due to the works of
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humankind
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human kind
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humankind
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, other
animals
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 have been affected and are either extinct or
at
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 the brink of extinction. In
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essay
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 I will discuss two main reasons for
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 and give them solutions. There are two main reasons for the eradication of animal species. The
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 one
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 deforestation. As humans cut down trees and make more room for homes for the
ever growing
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 population, the homes for certain
animals
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 as sloths are destroyed.
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 will cause a
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 in their ecosystem which will lead to extinction. Improper disposing of
garbage
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 is a huge threat to the
animals
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 living in the sea. Many countries have been known to dump their
garbage
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 in the sea.
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 leads to the pollution of water and
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 killing the
animals
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 living in it.
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, disposing of plastics into the sea has become a major problem as they are
non biodegradable
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. Turtles living in these waters inhale these plastics and eventually die. There are simple solutions to the problems discussed above.
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, the government should find alternative ways to build homes for the population, like building high rise apartments which take less space but
accomodate
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accommodate
 more families.
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 way clearing forests for new houses can be reduced.
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, there should be
proper
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disposing
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 of
garbage
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.
Garbage
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 can be made use
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 turning them into fertilisers which can be
benefitial
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beneficial
 for us. The public should be
adviced
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advised
 on proper
garbage
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dispose
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 and a fine should be given to anyone who does not obey. In conclusion, these are the main reasons why
animals
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 are becoming extinct. It is our duty to preserve them and
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apply
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maintaining proper
garbage
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disposing
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 and reduction in deforestation can really save these
animals
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.

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