Most of the world’s poor live in countries where tourism is a growth industry. The issue is that tourism does not benefit the poor. How can the income generated by tourism benefit the poor? And how can we ensure that tourism does not destroy traditional culture and ways of life?

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Indonesia especially the Province of Bali has been developing the

tourism

industry based on high-value culture

from

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several

decades long

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, and it is continuing as the main source of

income

for Balinese

people

Altough

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Although

tourism

brings benefits for local

citizen

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, in

fact

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that most of the

tourism

industry owners are not

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Balinese,

therefore

the local

people

will always

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viewer

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in their

home land

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. Foreign investment has

influence

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the development of

tourism

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the tourism

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sector in Bali particularly in the

accomodations

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accommodation

accommodations

facilities

such

hotel

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villa

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restaurant

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spa

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, yoga and

other facility

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. They have been providing the main

income

for local

people

Eventough

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the investors provide the working spaces, in the reality,

tourism

stakeholders hard to enhance their self-value because

doing

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the non-managerial skills job.

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, their

income

is still low and only covered to daily

live

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. Interestingly, the company of foreign investment is always generating profit every period of

acconting

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accounting

bookkeeping, which

those profit

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will

distributed

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to the shareholders in

offshore

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country.

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the great facility which has been provided by the investor, the most reason that tourists coming to Bali are to enjoy the high-value cultures, paramount panorama, and the beautiful

behavior

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balinese

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people

This

should have known by the

people

to utilize their rich

heritances

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in order to

generating

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income

, other

then

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asking job from

toursm

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tourism

corporations.

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this

will be the basis

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people

to stand

base

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on their

owne

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own

. According to

this

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unmutual benefits conditions, all

tourism

players and the

goverment

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government

should seat together in order to find

the

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great solutions for all. Open the

tourism

village based

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is on of the idea, the

people

get direct

income

from tourist that come directly to the village.

Other

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value is through

online based

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balines

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basslines

barlines

can

utilze

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utilize

the technology to build a relationship directly with tourist offshore

withhout

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without

any broker foreign broker here. To conclude,

the

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tourism

is the main

income

for

balineise

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Balinese

people

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and must

be increase

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the

income

by providing the direct actions for the

people

to generate

thier

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their

income

, so that the live balance and culture will

be exist

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Most of the world’s poor live in countries where tourism is a growth industry. The issue is that tourism does not benefit the poor. How can the income generated by tourism benefit the poor? And how can we ensure that tourism does not destroy traditional culture and ways of life?

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