university students often focus on one subject. However, some people think that universities should encourage students to learn a range of other subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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wide
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range of career
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for a
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. There are different
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of courses available. It depends upon
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which
subject
they choose. Many people believe that
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or universities taught
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various subjects, not only
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on
one
student
. I totally disagree with
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statement. A number of arguments support my opinions. The main
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reason is that students should master in
one
subject
only in a university. It helps them to achieve
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good grade and overall knowledge in that particular
subject
.
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computer science, there are many
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in
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will study
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coding, programming, database, graphics and many more. If
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in coding
then
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for him/her to get a job in that field. Another reason is that
,
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only
one
subject
does not distract students to get their aim. Sometimes,
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many
subject
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in
one
period distract many
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from their goals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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