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Many people that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect of others.What maighy have caused this situation.How to improve it?

#people #behaviour #lack #respect #maighy #situation
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society
 where people are more comfortable with
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themselves
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them selves
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 and being less concerned about
society
.In
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 we will see the major problem and solutions to
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. The main drawback, As we all know everything is getting digital from food to shopping to movies and we can
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easily
 access anything from our smart-phone and which
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leads
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 to make humans more comfortable . rather than attain any social event or hang out they are more like to stay home and enjoy
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 own company.
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 in recent
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 it is found that there
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increase
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 in cases of
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depression
 and anxiety because of loneliness. young age people are now more
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 they don't behave
respetfuly
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respectfully
 in
society
, in
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 to that youngsters are now more
enngaged
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engaged
 with there smartphones. and in some of the cases now they are so isolated themselves if anyone
instead
 to come out they insult them brutely. we can see in recent generations that there is clearly
lack
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 of respect towards elders for e.g another day
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 asked my nephew for a movie he said
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 to watch
movie
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a movie
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 at home only. To make it better, parents should grow their children in a correct social pattern like to engage them in more public programs like physical sports or travelling and communicate with them on a regular basis so they can share everything with parents and don't isolate themselves easily even though some parents can't focus on there children because of work but they should make their child busy with social activities and they should
also
 give basic skills like how to talk with someone with respect. To conclude,
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guardians
 should
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 more time with children and give them proper
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guidance
 to avoid isolation
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 good anticipates for
society
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