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The society would benefit from a ban of all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purposes and can even be damaging. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#society #ban #forms #purposes
The promotion on
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social media's as well as on
the
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televisions
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television
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 play an important role these days. Some
argues
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 that it should be banned because no longer use of these. As per my
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prospective
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, it has increased the efficiency of
business
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 by
promote
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selling
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the selling
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 of goods, aware
the
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consumer's
about
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 new launching products and many more informative messages. So, I disagree with
this
 statement
,
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 and would like to describe my views in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are
many
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 vital information's which get emphasis through mass media, to reduce
the
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cyber crime
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cybercrime
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.
For instance
, the guidelines of RBL to get confirmation OTP before doing any type of transaction or to tell someone was done by
famous
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 Bollywood actor to spread
a
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 educational concept to all, as a purpose to reduce cases of hacking. As a fruitful
results
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, people use it carefully and keep
this
 code under
there
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their
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 wrap. Apart from
this
, there are many manufacturing companies of
single
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product
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products
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 with
different
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the different
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 trade
name
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 in the race of
market
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.
such
 as
,
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cosmetic
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cosmetics
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,
grocery
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groceries
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, daily essentials. To serve as a trustworthy in front of the people. It is mandatory to advertise that on sites.
Hence
, the consumer's have many options to choose
according
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 to
thier
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their
 need.
Additionally
, it has been
great
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 impact on the business profitability. To conclude, sometimes it may be
intrupt
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interrupt
 interest in between the movie and series but beneficial for the consumer's and
manufactures
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manufacturers
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.
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