Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Culture

and rituals change don'

change with

generation

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they remain as it is but

now a days

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many

human

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think new

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genration

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generation

should follow

culture

whereas other that should be there own decision. In

following

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essay we will see both

side

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of view and opinions, I will

also

try to convey my opinion on

this

Firstly

,We should respect and follow our history and society, Our great

ancesisters

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ancestors

fought for our nation other than that we should

definately

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definitely

look up to our traditions and

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values. Holy books like

bible

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geeta

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qouran

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Quran

comes with important life lessons

eveything

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everything

writen

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written

in these books is

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meant

something for

world

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but

now a days

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nowadays

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many

yongsters

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youngsters

so busy with

there

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their

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phone they don'

have time for

tradtions

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traditions

and

culture

even tough in countries like India which is

secular

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nation where

diffrent

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different

types of cast and

culture

exisits

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exists

, young

floks

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folks

don'

take

there

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culture

seriously. for e.g. my nephew was so focused in his gaming he

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care for any festivals and prayers.

on the other hand

, In 21st century where everyone is so busy with

there

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life and choices

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people is changing day by day in

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addition

to that

recents

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recent

genrations

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generations

are more aware

about

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there own values and sentiments, they clearly know what

tradtion

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tradition

is right for them, in many countries we can see kids

now a days

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nowadays

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are vocal about there feeling they

don;

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to depend on anyone

also

thry

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they

want to choose there community by own because they don'

want to live in

society

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a society

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where everyone

pressure

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them to

folow

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traditions for e.g if

muslim

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Muslim

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girl

want

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to wear clothes by there own wish, she can

abslutely

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absolutely

can. In my opinion, I think some

tradition

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values

makes

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us better human being but there

shuould

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should

be no restrictions and society should not force anyone to follow any pattern.

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