Some people think young people should follow the traditions of their society. Others think that they should be free to behave as individuals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Culture
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and rituals change don'
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change with
generation
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they remain as it is but
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many
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humans
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think new
think new
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genration
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generation
should follow
culture
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whereas other that should be there own decision. In
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essay we will see both
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of view and opinions, I will
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try to convey my opinion on
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Firstly
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,We should respect and follow our history and society, Our great
ancesisters
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ancestors
fought for our nation other than that we should
definately
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definitely
look up to our traditions and
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moral
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values. Holy books like
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the bible
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,
geeta
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or
qouran
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Quran
comes with important life lessons
eveything
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everything
writen
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written
in these books is
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meant
something for
world
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but
now a days
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many
yongsters
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youngsters
so busy with
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phone they don'
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have time for
tradtions
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traditions
and
culture
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even tough in countries like India which is
secular
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a secular
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nation where
diffrent
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different
types of cast and
culture
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exisits
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exists
, young
floks
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folks
don'
t
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take
there
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culture
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seriously. for e.g. my nephew was so focused in his gaming he
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doesn't
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t
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care for any festivals and prayers.
on the other hand
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, In 21st century where everyone is so busy with
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life and choices
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of
people is changing day by day in
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addition
to that
recents
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recent
genrations
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generations
are more aware
about
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there own values and sentiments, they clearly know what
tradtion
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tradition
is right for them, in many countries we can see kids
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are vocal about there feeling they
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t
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to depend on anyone
also
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thry
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they
want to choose there community by own because they don'
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want to live in
society
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a society
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where everyone
pressure
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pressures
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them to
folow
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follow
traditions for e.g if
muslim
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Muslim
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girl
want
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to wear clothes by there own wish, she can
abslutely
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absolutely
can. In my opinion, I think some
tradition
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values
makes
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us better human being but there
shuould
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should
be no restrictions and society should not force anyone to follow any pattern.
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