You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to a workplace every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

The given bar chart describes
about
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surveying of
people
who like to buy and drink
coffee
and
tea
in Sydney,
Melbourne
Brisbane
Adelaide
and Hobart in
last
four weeks . Generally speaking, most of the
people
went to a cafe for
coffee
and
tea
, whereas the lowest of selling is fresh
coffee
. It can be seen that most
people
more than 60
percent
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in Sydney,
Melbourne
and Hob art went to
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a cafe
the cafe
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cafe
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cafes
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for
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buy
coffee
and
tea
while it is
ramarkable
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remarkable
that the proportion of residents in
Adelaide
and Brisbane approximately 49
percent
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and 51
percent
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respectively;
however
, the
people
in
Adelaide
went to
coffee
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a coffee
the coffee
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shop to bought
cofee
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coffee
Cofee
recently rather than buying
coffee
or
tea
almost 1
percent
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.
Additionally
, the proportion of the
people
who bought instant
coffee
in
Adelaide
and Hobart and
Melbourne
more
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than a number of
people
bought fresh
coffee
about a small minority.
Morever
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Moreover
, In Brisbane who bought regular
coffee
rather than who bought fresh
coffee
almost 20
percent
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.
On the contrary
, In Sydney and
Melbourne
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,Melbourne
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the percentage of
the
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people
bought
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who bought
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fresh
coffee
less than normal
coffee
well under 5
percent
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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