Holding International games such as The Olympic Games is an exciting event. Some people think that it has positive effects while other argue that it is a waste of money. Discuss both sides of view and give your own opinion.

Nowdays
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, it becomes
trend
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a trend
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that whosoever host International Sports
events
are more developed countries in comparison to nations who are not showing interest in hosting any
such
world level
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events
. Hosting
biggest
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the biggest
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sports or adventurous
events
at
national
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the national
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or international level is an
advatage
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advantage
for the
country
.
This
boost
country
's economy in many ways which will be discussed in
below
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the below
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paragraphs and
consequently
there are other factors that every
country
should consider before representing themselves as
a
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interested candidate in hosting
such
occassions
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occasions
.
First
and
formost
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foremost
advantage of hosting
such
events
helps
country
's to become more popular among others and
also
give lots of other benefits like more employment,increase in
toursim
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tourism
at international level.
Additionally
,
country
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a country
the country
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who
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that
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participate in
such
events
bring
lot
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a lot
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of contestants and audience
at
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in
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one spot and
this
somehow
increase
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increases
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toursim
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tourism
and income in many sectors like booking hotels,going
for
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to
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restraunts
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restaurants
and many more.
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