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Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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There is no denying the fact that
current
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 lifestyle suited a numerous amount of people,
however
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 it harmed others. Considering the pressure and the drawbacks of
this
 modern life,
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 advocate individuals who have agreed with these thoughts.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons
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 my opinion.
Firstly
, The most significant reason why I believe that
this
 current lifestyle is harmful
for
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 families, is their children requirements, in
this
 period of time youngsters are competitive to be the best
by
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many ways,
such
 as purchasing a contemporary device to be better or equivalent with others,
wich
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 will make an economic pressure on there
care givers
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,
in
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 that will make an unpleasant feeling to the parents, that they want to equate their youngsters with the community.
Secondly
,
this
high speed
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 life will press on people to join and keep up with
tbe
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the
be
 trends, which will make their
lifes
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lives
life's
life
 challenging and tough,
hence
 will be more arguments in families that will lead to several alarming issues. To illustrate,
a
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recent research concluded that most of the divorce cases these days happened because of the nerve to keep up with the contemporary trends wanting to own overpriced belongings
such
 as brand bags and clothes. In conclusion, I agree with the idea that the modern ways to live have an unacceptable impact on families and their
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.
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i
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 admit that
this
 life had
a remarkable benefits
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 on our lives but in my point of
view
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 the disadvantages outweigh the advantages.
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