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The maps show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The maps show changes in the village of Meadowside and the town of Fonton from 1962 to now. Write a report of at least 150 words describing the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The three maps show the development that has taken place
of
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 the
two
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areas
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;
Meadowside
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Village
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as well as
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 Fonton. Back in the day, precisely 1962, the
two
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areas
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 were more isolated from one another. The
two
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areas
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 had no transport between them, and both
areas
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 were smaller in
size
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. Roughly
two
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 decades later, the
two
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areas
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 have a transport system between
the
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two
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. A road was built between the
two
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areas
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, which not only helps with transport between the
two
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areas
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,
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 but
also
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 aids with business and trading. The
two
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areas
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 have expanded in
size
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, especially
Meadowside
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village
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 almost
having
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tripled in
size
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.
Meadowside
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village
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 appears to have a larger road with a housing estate, leisure complex, and superstore, showing the increase in development.
Although
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 Fonton hasn't seemed to have an increase in development in 1985, it has still slightly expanded. In
present
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 time, the
two
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areas
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 expanded immensely, connecting one another.
Meadowside
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village
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 now known as
Meadowside
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 suburbs has increased in
size
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. The land connecting the
two
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areas
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 now has a hotel, a train station and a business park. These changes help boom the business in these
areas
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 and strengthen the economy.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, areas, meadowside, village, size with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • rural area
  • expansion
  • infrastructure
  • commercial development
  • housing development
  • population growth
  • key landmarks
  • transformation
  • local community
  • economy
  • environmental impact
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