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People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #cities #face #life #government #move #towns
THE
PEOPLE
 INHABITING LARGER
CITIES
 OFTEN EXPERIENCE DIFFICULTIES ON A DAILY BASIS IN COMPARISON TO
PEOPLE
 LIVING IN RURAL
AREAS
.
THEREFORE
, SOME BELIEVE THAT GOVERNMENTAL BODIES SHOULD ENCOURAGE CITIZENS TO
MOVE
 TO REGIONAL TOWNS. IN MY OPINION, LIVING IN LARGE
CITIES
 COMES WITH SEVERAL ADVANTAGES,
HOWEVER
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PEOPLE
 OFTEN FACE
DIFFCULTIES
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DIFFICULTIES
. THE AFOREMENTIONED DISADVANTAGES CAN BE DIVIDED INTO: PERSONAL OR INTER-RELATIONSHIP AND ACADEMIC OR JOB-RELATED HARDSHIPS.
PEOPLE
 LIVING IN
CITIES
 USUALLY STRUGGLE WITH A LACK OF TIME. BETWEEN THE LONG WORKING HOURS AND THE TRAFFIC JAMS, THERE IS BARELY
ANYTIME
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 FOR HEALTHY AND FULFILLING RELATIONSHIPS FOR
ALOT
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A LOT
 OF
PEOPLE
.
FOR EXAMPLE
, DUE TO THE BUSY LIFE AND DIFFERING SCHEDULES, PARENTS
DONT
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DON'T
 GET TO HAVE MEALS WITH THEIR CHILDREN.
FURTHERMORE
, COUPLES
DONT
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DON'T
 GET TO HAVE LONG TALKS AND RESOLVE ANY ISSUES THAT ARISE IN THEIR RELATIONSHIPS.
ALSO
,
ALTHOUGH
OPPURTUNITIES
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OPPORTUNITIES
 ARE FAR MORE IN LARGE
CITIES
, USUALLY JOBS ARE VERY COMPETITIVE ,
THIS
 APPLIES TO SCHOOLS AS WELL.
AS A
RESULT
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PEOPLE
 HAVE TO WORK HARDER AND OFTEN SACRIFICE THEIR SOCIAL LIVES AND
HEALTH RELATED
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HEALTH-RELATED
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 NEEDS
SUCH
 AS
,
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apply
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EXCERCISING
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EXERCISING
 AND HEALTHY MEAL PREPARATION
INORDER
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IN ORDER
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 TO BE ABLE TO KEEP UP.
FURTHERMORE
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THIS
 HAS A NEGATIVE IMPACT ON THEIR MENTAL HEALTHS.
THEREFORE
, IT WOULD REASONABLE FOR THE GOVERNMENT TO ENCOURAGE
PEOPLE
 TO
MOVE
 TO REGIONAL TOWNS,
FOR EXAMPLE
, BY CREATING JOB
OPPURTUBITIES
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OPPORTUNITIES
 IN THOSE
AREAS
 AS WELL AS ENCOURAGING INVESTORS TO
MOVE
 TO THOSE
AREAS
FOR EXAMPLE
 BY REDUCING TAX AND CREATING TOURIST ATTRACTION SITES. IN CONCLUSION,
PEOPLE
 LIVING IN LARGER
CITIES
 WHO EXPERIENCE
DIFFCULTIES
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DIFFICULTIES
 ON A DAILY BASIS STAY IN THOSE
AREAS
 DUE TO THE JOB AND ACADEMIC SUPERIORITY IN THOSE
AREAS
.
THEREFORE
, WOULD BE HELPFUL IF
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GOVERNMENTAL
GOVERNEMENTAL
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THE GOVERNEMENTAL
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BODEIS
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BODIES
 CREATED JOB
OPPURTUNITIES
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OPPORTUNITIES
 IN REGIONAL TOWNS TO ENCOURAGE
PEOPLE
 TO
MOVE
 THERE.
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