The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in the sea. What are the reason and solution?

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damaged seriously by human activities.

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poachers chase rare creatures and

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too much.

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, Tasmanian Tigers disappeared due to people's activities because their fur was valuable. The

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problem is pollution

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take care of the environment. Namely,

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they carry out emissions into the air, rivers and soil.

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discharge harmful substances into rivers and fish become died from

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. The solution to the above problems is to tighten the laws at the state level, thereby stopping the extermination of

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for breeding for them. Organizations should develop an environmental policy and include in

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activities

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as the breeding of juveniles. There are already organizations in Russia that are actively engaged in

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LUKOIL. LUKOIL has its own reserve, where they breed rare fish like sturgeon. And every year activists release it into the sea. In conclusion, if our government were to ban damage by nature,

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for themselves, the

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would get support and the opportunity to live today.

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, severe consequences await us.

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