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Scientists have been warning for many years that to protect the environment, we have to limit the use of energy in our daily lives. Despite warning many people do not pay attention to this. What are the reasons for this and how can people be encouraged to save the environment?

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Scientist
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 have been admonition to care for the
environment
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since
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 several years.we have to restrict the
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 of energy in our routine lives in spite of warning many
people
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 in society do not think on
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 serious issue. There could be multiple
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 for
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occurance
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occurrence
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, practical suggestions can be put forth to encouraged
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.Both the reasons as well as measures are discussed
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 individuals prefer for commuting by private vehicles.
people
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use
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 transport for travelling to their workplace due to
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 vehicles are running from diesel and petrol,
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 releases co2 in
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.
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 one is, around the
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 many businesses
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 in the city area
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 these factories produced harmful toxic
guses
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gases
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chemicles
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chemicals
 in
air
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 which makes oxygen impure air. Adding
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, a lot of
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 cut down
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trees
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tress
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 for their beneficial purpose
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 might be affect
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. In order to improve the
situation
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 some steps can be taken. most importantly,
government
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 should do
campaign
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for
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 save
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environment
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the environment
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 and make
people
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 aware
for
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importance
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the importance
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 of natural
habitat
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 in our lives.
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,
higher
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 council should make strict rules and regulations against the
deforestion
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deforestation
 for everyone do not cut
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trees
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 and make our surroundings clean. To recapitulate, it is indeed that
community
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communities
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 do not reduce the
use
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 of energy in their day to day life because of the
use
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 of transportation and
manuefacturing
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manufacturing
 units. I believe that
people
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 should learn about
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saving
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environment
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the environment
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 and
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, authority
make
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 laws on
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 the
use
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 of automobile.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy-efficient appliances
  • renewable energy
  • conservation measures
  • sustainability campaigns
  • climate change
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • tax rebates
  • green technology
  • eco-friendly habits
  • government legislation
  • sustainable living
  • renewable resources
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