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Scientists have been warning for many years that to protect the environment, we have to limit the use of energy in our daily lives. Despite warning many people do not pay attention to this. What are the reasons for this and how can people be encouraged to save the environment?

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Scientist
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 have been admonition to care for the
environment
since
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for
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 several years.we have to restrict the
use
 of energy in our routine lives in spite of warning many
people
 in society do not think on
this
 serious issue. There could be multiple
reason
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 for
such
occurance
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occurrence
;
however
, practical suggestions can be put forth to encouraged
people
.Both the reasons as well as measures are discussed
further
. Examining the root causes, the foremost one is ,
mostly
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 individuals prefer for commuting by private vehicles.
people
use
this
 transport for travelling to their workplace due to
this
such
 vehicles are running from diesel and petrol,
this
 releases co2 in
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
The another
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 one is, around the
world
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 many businesses
runs
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 in the city area
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, as a result,
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as a result
 these factories produced harmful toxic
guses
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gases
guess
 and
chemicles
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chemicals
 in
air
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the air
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 which makes oxygen impure air. Adding
further
, a lot of
people
 cut down
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trees
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tress
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trees
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 for their beneficial purpose
also
this
 might be affect
environment
. In order to improve the
situation
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 some steps can be taken. most importantly,
government
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the government
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 should do
campaign
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a campaign
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for
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to
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 save
environment
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the environment
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 and make
people
 aware
for
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of
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importance
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the importance
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 of natural
habitat
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habitats
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 in our lives.
Moreover
,
higher
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the higher
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 council should make strict rules and regulations against the
deforestion
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deforestation
 for everyone do not cut
tress
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trees
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 and make our surroundings clean. To recapitulate, it is indeed that
community
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communities
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 do not reduce the
use
 of energy in their day to day life because of the
use
 of transportation and
manuefacturing
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manufacturing
 units. I believe that
people
 should learn about
saves
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saving
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environment
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the environment
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 and
also
, authority
make
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makes
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 laws on
restrict
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restricting
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 the
use
 of automobile.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy-efficient appliances
  • renewable energy
  • conservation measures
  • sustainability campaigns
  • climate change
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • tax rebates
  • green technology
  • eco-friendly habits
  • government legislation
  • sustainable living
  • renewable resources
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