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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Other believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #environment #government’s #responsibility
The line graph describes the changes in average emissions of CO2 per person in four different countries from 1967-2007. In 1967, the largest
emission
 was in the UK, with 11 metric
tons
 per person. It was followed by
Sweden
 and Italy (around 9 metric
tons
 and 4.5 metric
tons
 respectively). Portugal emitted the smallest amount of CO2 - lower than 2 metric
tons
. Clearly, the UK remained the country with the largest amount of CO2
emission
 over
this
 period,
although
 there was a decline to 9 metric
tons
 in 2007.
Sweden
 CO2
emission
 peaked at just above 10 metric
tons
 in 1977 before decreasing swiftly to 5.5 metric
tons
 in 2007. Italy and
Sweden
 showed an opposite trend during the following years. The
emission
 in Italy overtook that in
Sweden
 in 1988. After that, it rose to just below 8 metric
tons
 in 2007, while Portugal saw the most drastic rise, with its
emission
 increasing to the same level
of
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Sweden
 eventually. Overall, the graph clearly shows how the
emission
 level in the UK and
Sweden
 decreased and the CO2 emissions in the remaining two countries increased over the four decades.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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