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Some people believe that university education should focus on the skills of employment for the future. Others think that university education should focus on academic study only. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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With the development of the times, more and more people have the opportunity to
study
 in universities. Even though it is essential to
focus
 on the
skills
 of employment for the future, I still believe that university education should
focus
 on
academic
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. Some people argue that
student
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students
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 should
focus
 on the
skills
 of
employment
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. In
the
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 case, mastering solid professional
skills
 makes it easier to find a job and it is beneficial to improve their practical ability.
At
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the
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meanwhile , it is convenient for
students
 to enter
the
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society and better deal with the problems that they possibly face at work.
However
,
this
 view is based on the belief that
students
 can easily educate from universities and find a good job.
Students
 cannot
focus
 on the
skills
 of employment if they cannot graduate with high marks smoothly.
Therefore
, it is important to make sure
students
 pay more attention to academic
study
. In spite of
this
, other people argue that university education should
focus
 on academic
study
,
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 because with more academic knowledge, it is easier to make achievements in their fields.
Besides
, grades are necessary
in
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 our society, and it is a stepping stone for
students
 to step into
the
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society. If someone has plenty of
skills
 but does not have a good score, no one will know how excellent you are.
Last
 but not least,
theory
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 is the premise of practice. Practice is blind without adequate guidance from theory. In conclusion, I would say that university education should
focus
 on academic
study
. It is vitally important to educate
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student
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 to consider what they really wanna in the future.
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