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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution
Raising fuel prices is the best option because it would lower demand.
This
 is because the laws of economics dictate that the higher the
price
 of a commodity, the lower the consumption of that product and
this
 will lead to fewer people using vehicles.
For instance
, when the
price
 of fuel skyrocketed during the oil crisis in the 1970s, there was a huge reduction in the number of cars on the road. Raising the
price
 of fuel would
also
 have a knock-on effect on the
price
 of goods because they cost more to transport.
This
 would result in people having less money to spend at the pump,
thus
 reducing the number of cars on the road even
further
.
For example
, the New York Times reported that the higher the
price
 of food in a city, the more likely people were to use public transport, principally because they couldn’t afford a car.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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