Many experts believe that our production of carbon dioxide and other greenhouse gases is heating the atmosphere, and this could be very dangerous for human life The problems and the solutions about this

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disaster
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for the earth
such
as the increase of temperature in
atmosphere
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. In
this
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. The highest producer of
carbon
dioxide
and
another
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air
polution
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pollution
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industrial
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and transportation
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the backbone for economics in every country, and it needs to operate as cheap as possible to provide affordable goods and services for people. If they
use
environmental
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friendly
machine
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, it could increase the price and will affect to country and people economics.
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, electricity in Indonesia still
use
coal as
it
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source, the commodity is affordable for the industries but
produce
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much
of
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carbon
dioxide
.
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, the main
problem
of global warming
are
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air
polution
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pollution
generated from critical human activities. The solution
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the
problem
above
are
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implementation
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of sustainable
energy
and transport.
Carbon
dioxide
generate
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by the producer could
be reduce
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by
increase
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the usage of renewable
energy
such
as solar panels, water
energy
and wind turbine.
In
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the other side, the government around the world must encourage their people to
use
public transport or electric car.
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,
Singapore
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government give more tax incentive for the community which
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electric
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car and
also
promote the implementation of solar panels. That's why environmental friendly
energy
and transportation will be the key to
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the
problem
. In conclusion, for years
industrial
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and transportation
sector
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are the biggest producer of
carbon
dioxide
because they try to produce cheaper goods and services. The solution
of
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this
problem
is the massive implementation
electric
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car and
also
convert
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the usage of fossil
energy
to renewable
energy
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