Today, wordly corona virus widespread become every nation problem, including education sector and it make many educational officers and experts suggest the government to spent more budget for free internet access. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In our new era, nations have been gripped by many issues, especially the education part of the
government
, and lots of authorities advocate that it is better to pour more money on
accsessing
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accessing
the
internet
for the purpose of free usage. I
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believe
it would consider as one of the notions, and I totally agree with
this
statement. There are at least two significant reasons why some people disagree
whith
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with
this
idea.
Firstly
, despite the fact that free
internet
is appealing to everybody, allocating more budget to it means that the
government
may diminish the other sectors' budget, and it would irritating for those who
does
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not interest in it.
For example
,
ageing
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the ageing
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population would prefer an increase in
welfare
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institution
institutions
isntitutoin
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budget rather than the
internet
.
Thus
, they could be mad about
this
decision with the
government
.
Furthermore
, they assume that there are far too many fraud men that could abuse
this
zero cost
internet
for aims that are not
consist
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with the
government
's goals. Downloading movies and surfing social networks could be the best examples
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this
.
On the other hand
, I presume free
internet
is compulsory these days to guarantee both teachers and students health. it could be wholesome for other
citizents
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citizens
to avoid
unneccessary
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unnecessary
traveling
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throughout the city and dispersing virus among the people, namely in crowded cities, and towns which conform
less
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protocols.
Besides
,
this
type of
internet
not only is perfect for students who are studying in big cities, but
also
it brings a unique opportunity for those studying in
countryside
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. Regarding its benefits,
Therefore
, free-cost
internet
conributes
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contributes
society to enhancing in education level. in
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conclusion
,
althouth
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although
there are some people who do not support
this
theory, it could be wholesome for every single individual
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country
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. I think by finding
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solution to resolve
this
issue, experts could convince opponents too
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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