Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree?

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It is mostly considered that businesses in developing countries consider
men
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better in positions that are
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mostly
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noticeably high compared to
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.I completely agree that women should
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be given a chance in positions that are highly noticeably
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think that women can take any job that
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do.It is generally known that it is a man's world but females nowadays go an extra mile with their tasks.
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, construction was previously known to be
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job but currently, almost all females can do the task
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believe that ladies need to be given the same chances as
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do.
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, there are some jobs that are painted as if they can only be led by
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only,
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means that as a female , it is almost impossible to take on the majority of
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because one ends up feeling excluded and
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, a female individual can not lead the construction company due to the strength
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needed in construction, the heaviness of the work to be done and it becomes heavy for ladies to take it on,
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it is always gents that take over the task. To sum up, l still completely believe that females must be given
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opportunities
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companies as long as they qualify to do the task and in
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everyone will
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take it
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  • glass ceiling
  • workforce representation
  • gender diversity
  • equal opportunity
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  • empowerment
  • barrier
  • discrimination
  • inequality
  • bias
  • reinforce
  • inclusive
  • combat
  • strive for
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  • progressive
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