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Band 3.5

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram illustrates 3 different types of queries sent by the residents of a single city to the office of tourism in 2011 within a period of 6
months
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. Overall, individual enquiries were the most, while the least was sent by letter/ email. In the
first
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 3
months
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, the use of letters/emails dropped steadily from just below 800 to about 650. From
March
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 to May the numbers reduced slightly from above 600 to just under 400.
Then
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 in the sixth ,
month
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 the figures remained stagnant at approximately 490. The questions delivered in person started at nearly 400 in January and rose significantly to 800 in
March
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. After ,that it rose throughout the
last
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 3
months
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 until it almost reached 2000. The in-person suggestions overtook the number of enquiries done by email/letter in February and did the same in
March
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 when it had crossroads with telephone users. Telephone users were many
in
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 the beginning of the period with 900 users.
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, at the end of six ,
months
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 it was the
second
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-best after being taken over in
March
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 by those who went to the office physically with 1600 and 1900 respectively.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • pattern
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • similarity
  • difference
  • fluctuation
  • outlier
  • exception
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • data
  • feature
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