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More and more women have joined the work force in recent years. What reasons do women have to be more professionaly driven? What effects does this trend have on their families?

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women
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 role in society has changed and progressed a lot over the
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 decades. Nowadays, the domestic role of
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 is rarely observed due to
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recognition
recongnition
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the recongnition
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 of
iguality
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equality
quality
 rights between genres and
women
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 incorporation in different areas of
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the labor
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labor
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 market. The following paragraphs will discuss the reasons
of
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for
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women
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 visibility in
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work spaces
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workspaces
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 and its
effects
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 on their families. To start with the reasons
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this
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 new trend,
women
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 always
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 had excellent abilities to develop different tasks.
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, old fashioned
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beliefs
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believe
 applied in the past
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 as
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 should stay at home and develop home chores or take care
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 the children never recognised
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women's
women
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women's
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 abilities outside of homes. Thanks to that times
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 changed and
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society
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 vision too,
women
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 could develop their role in
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society and show that there is no difference between genres developing specific tasks.
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, nowadays we can see
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 occupying different high charges
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 as politics, president or business that in the past was
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impossible
 to imagine. Another reason
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women
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 presence at
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,
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 is the expensive cost of
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living
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. Families have so
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 expenses to pay that are difficult to afford by only one person, so as result
the
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both family members have to
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. From another angle, the
effects
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 of these changes can
also
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 vary. On the positive side,
women
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 participation in
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work force
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workforce
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 makes the working environment much more diverse and integral. Female perspective and opinion can contribute and complement males opinions, which may assure an equilibrate and dynamic
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work space
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workspace
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.
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, some might think having
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 at
work
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 may bring adverse
effects
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susch
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such
 as family
desintegration
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disintegration
 or lack of
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children's
children
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children's
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 education. To sum up, it is clear
to
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see that the increase
of
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in
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women
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 involvement in
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the labor
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labor
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 market has been caused by social changes. And these can bring positive and negative
effects
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 to society.
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