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it is the responsibility of the government to take care of the health of citizens or citizens should take care of their own health. Give your own opinion?

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Healthy
people
 are crucial for the development and prosperity of any
nation
,
thus
 special attention should be given to the
health
 care sector. Some believe that the
government
 should be accountable for the
health
 of its
people
 while others argue that it is a personal problem.
This
 essay dwells
into
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both
 the topic and provides a personal opinion.
To begin
 with, the current pandemic situation has provided us with a clear insight into the importance of
health
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 sector in a country. Even the most developed countries were unable to provide proper
health
 care during the crisis.
Additionally
, physically fit
generation
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generations
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 contribute to
the
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upliftment and they drive the
nation
 towards prosperity.
Moreover
, the
government
 has the authority to implement proper eating habits and incorporate
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nutrition
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 rich diet in public schools and colleges.
Therefore
, for the betterment of the
nation
 as a whole ,it is
advisible
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advisable
 for the
government
 to make
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a decision
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decision
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decisions
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 regarding its
citizens
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citizen's
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 physical fitness.
Although
,
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 the
government
 should take some responsibility for the well being of its
people
, it is truly possible only when
people
 take part in it the whole heartily.
For example
, authorities cannot possibly monitor all our day to day actions
such
 as exercising, eating habits and drinking habits. Proper exercise and diet are
both
 required so as to avoid lifestyle diseases like diabetics and pressure. Each individual is responsible for the way they treat their bodies and the life that they choose to live. To conclude, I strongly believe that a healthy
nation
 can be
acheived
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achieved
 only if
both
 the
government
 and its public join forces. *963Both of them have separate
responsiblity
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responsibility
 and they should abide by it
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