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In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed?

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It is irrefutable to say that,
Media
 plays an important role in
ours’
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 daily life. Some
people
 believe that
,
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Media
 should have
freedom
 so that it would reveal truth;
while
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on the other hand
, some
people
 argue that
media
 should be restricted. The following essay would explain
about
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various arguments both in favour of
,
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 and against,
the
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media
 power and
freedom
. There are myriads of reasons in the favour of
media
, the most conspicuous one is that
media
 share useful information and entertain
people
 and in today’s world
media
 helps to inform
people
 about government. Not only
media
 expose corrupt politicians but
also
 politicians have fear of
media
 that if they do something wrong they would have to explain
about
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their wrong acts, policies and corruption.
Moreover
,
media
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the media
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 expose corruption deals.
For example
, Panama leaks.
In addition
,
media
also
 provide good entertainment stuff,
such
 as
,
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 movies, songs, wildlife, weather forecast and family shows.
Nevertheless
, it is
also
 evident that the power and
freedom
 of
media
 without responsibility had proven adverse effects on
the
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society.
In
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 the contrary,
Media
freedom
 is
problem
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a problem
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, when
media
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the media
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 expose and try to interfere personal
life’s
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lives
life
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 of politicians, celebrities and other famous
personality
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personalities
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.
Media
 wrongly interfere in the personal lives to increase the audience and ratings.
Hence
, it is
cleared
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media
 should have restrictions and governments should impose some policies to define certain boundaries for the
media
. In conclusion, I pen down saying that, without the shadow of a doubt,
Media
 advantages overweigh its disadvantages and to make it better government and law enforcement agencies should take
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.
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