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These days many us prefer to throw damaged things away, whereas in the past people used to repair damaged items and keep them for a long time. Explain why you think this change has happened? What are the effects of this change in attitude?

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Life is about
changes
. And the lifestyle has changed in
past
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 couple of decades. Earlier
people
 use to
repair
 old and faulty things,
however
now a days
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nowadays
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people
 throw away the damaged items. In
this
essay
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 we will discuss
about
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why these
changes
 have happened and
effects
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their effects
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 on the
attitude
? Why
these
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changes
has
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occured
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occurred
 in
the
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society? The reason is
that earlier
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that earlier person
those earlier people
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people
where
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 having limited excess to the resources and the earning was
comparitively
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comparatively
 less whereas in present scenario individuals are earning well from there jobs or businesses which has enabled them to purchase more and easily.
The another
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 factor is that in old times the person
need
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 to go to
market
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 or malls for buying stuff they need but in today's scene we can purchase any item from online websites starting from household to electronics items. The
last
 factor is time and expenses of
repair
.
Now a days
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 individuals
has
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 less time but have more money to spend so, they prefer to buy new versions of the thing rather than
repair
.
In contrast
 to
this
 few decades ago
people
 have
panelty
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penalty
 of time but less money
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therefore
 they go for
repair
. All these
changes
 in the lifestyle of the
people
is
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 contributing in different
attitude
also
. The study from
central
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 university says that
arround
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around
 80%
individuals
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of individuals
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 prefer to use
nad
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and
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 throw mobile phones if they
accidentally broken
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broke
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 it. Similar in household
arround
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around
 65%
people
 exchange or buy new stuff if old one got damaged.
For
example
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 our
parents
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parent's
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attitude
was preserve
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was preserved
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 the equipment as long as possible
that is
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attitude
 was called
as
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apply
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preserving but due to throwing or changing
thing
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things
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 the
attitude
 is called
as
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a
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throw away
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throw-away
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attitude
.
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